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SERVICE 03 —
ANATOMY
EDIT
PASS
Full script from raw material.
You have a rough cut. The footage works. The story is there. But viewers are leaving at the twenty-minute mark. An Anatomy Edit Pass identifies exactly where tension collapses — and rebuilds the structure to restore momentum.
DOCUMENTARY SCRIPT BUILD
WHAT YOU RECEIVE
Full narrative analysis
Timestamped structural notes
Revised edit map
Openign re-hook suggestions
Sequence tightening recommendations
TURNAROUND · 5-7 working days
In many documentaries, the edit answers questions before the audience has time to ask them. When that happens, tension disappears. Often the solution is not more information — it's better sequencing.
BETTER
SEQUENCING.
01 —
What the viewer knows — information architecture, not footage quantity
03 —
How uncertainty escalates — jeopardy must compound, not repeat
X WEAK
02 —
When they learn it — reveal timing is the single biggest lever in documentary editing
04 —
The problem is rarely the footage. It's almost always the sequence.
X THIS IS THE TARGET
Controlled revelation
In a quiet London back alley, a street fight is about to ignite. This is not a clash between strangers — but a final, brutal showdown between two men who once called each other allies. Caught on unforgiving CCTV, a bitter rivalry culminates in a moment of terrifying finality. Both men reach for their weapons. The survivor will later claim self-defence — but the evidence will leave a profound quandary for a jury to unpick. What truly happened in those critical moments, and can justice prevail when the truth is hidden beneath the dark rules of gang loyalties?
IF YOUR FILM
ISN’T HOLDING
YET — THIS IS
where we fix it.
Send me the cut. I'll watch it properly and tell you exactly what's happening.
THE METHOD
The Same Story,
Three Ways
One version explains everything. One version withholds too much. One version builds curiosity and escalation. The difference is structure — and this is what it looks like in practice.
X AVOID
Exposition dump
Exauce Ngimbi was killed in a street altercation in London following a dispute between two former associates. The incident was captured on CCTV. The man responsible — a former ally — was subsequently charged and stood trial, claiming self-defence. The case centred on gang loyalties, witness reliability, and the interpretation of footage showing both men reaching for weapons. The jury was asked to determine whether the killing constituted murder or a lawful act of self-defence.
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SCRIPT SURGERY
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You have a draft. I restructure it.
Artificial withholding
Something happened in a London alleyway. Two men. One night. The consequences would devastate everyone involved. What really took place in those final moments may never be fully understood. This is a story about loyalty, violence, and the impossible search for truth.
ANATOMY EDIT PASS
You have a cut. I rebuild the map.